Thursday, March 15, 2012

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Rating: 4.0

Through the Tall, Dark Oak and Pine tress.
On to the side of the mountains, into the valley of Forgiveness.
With the shyness of Romance, and with the soft touch of the breeze.
sacrifice thy purity of thy soul, within her heart.
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Louis Cecile 17 March 2012

Quite a good build up to lead to the last line of poem. Good descriptions and the pacing and length work well.

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