Friday, April 18, 2008

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As I stand by the unnamed love,
and see her joke, smile laugh and jeast,
her face is like the heavenly dove,
may I lie with you and sleep for time the reast.
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S.C. Setai
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Chantelle Clark 18 April 2008

I really liked the rhyme scheme within this poem. I see that you speak of love, as if you have experienced it in such a way that you know what it is to be loyal and want to show this appreciation forever, with an everlasting touch. Very well written. I am going to point out some spelling mistakes: brightest**, always**, Thoughts** and Beauty**. I am not sure about the grammar. but it seems fine. Well done. Chantelle.

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