Sitting By A River Comments

marge? MARGE***: noun \ˈmärj archaic : margin - - - - - - - - - - - - - or my cousin Margaret's nickname. : ========================== BUT, i don't usually speak archaic! mentioning monkeys and hornbills brings back memories of a trip to a national park in Thailand. but i'll take U.S, scenery and wildlife any day. cheaper! Stops awhile for traps to check or a casting net to throw........ i like how you arranged this line to make a rhyme with the preceding line (i thought preceeding; i was apparently wrong) . wow! you went from a wildlife tour to a foreboding of man-made doom. of course maybe it was a natural leak of oil from the Earth. that IS where oil was formed and comes from: underground. right? hmmm. maybe man-made doom is more likely. ====================================== this reminds me of most of my poems in that it has rhyming of successive lines and the lines are fairly long. i didn't even seem to notice at first that the lines were rhyming, perhaps because the lines are relatively long. a few times i have broken my long lines into two pieces each. the rhyming words are thereby separated by a line NOT ending in a rhyming word, BUT i think this would give natural points for readers to pause and catch a quick breath, especially since you do not use commas. i might break lines up in more of my poems, but i usually write them in a notebook so i often make the lines about as long as the paper's lines allow and then it just gets typed the same way! :) keep feeding those predators! bri :)

A beautiful description, a wonderful poem.

The beauty (and danger) of the river and its grandeur are set to dance in the mind of the reader, until the finishing lines, where mans hand once again threatens to destroy

In this poem, you have come out with flying colours as a landscape artist and shown nature as it is observed while sitting by a river after a heavy downpour. But at the same time you have also expressed your deep concern for global problems like pollution of water. Thanks, My Friend. Look at a fine expression- An oppressive stillness pervades in the sweltering heat.