Wednesday, January 20, 2010

Sincerity Is Vague Comments

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You can't get near me,
there's no way how.
There's something you'd want,
which I wouldn't allow.
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Melanie Walendowsky Baker
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Dr. Ratan Bhattacharjee 20 January 2010

He was sincere, but not you. So U did not allow him to get near you. Am I correct in assessing the motif behind your poem? But the melodious rhyming is quite interesting. Why so short? Lyric? But this love lyric marked by funny approach to life could be a bit longer to sustain the argument. I have not got the reaction of the listener.

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