Thursday, January 29, 2009

Silent Moon Comments

Rating: 4.8

silent moon it sits and waits
oh the depth of which I cannot fathom
desperate toll and chasing wind
the sun left stranded in the night
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Arthur Q. Kromwelle
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Greenwolfe 1962 10 February 2009

That is a pretty good rhyme in this verse. Beyond that, I have a hard time determining what this is about. It is obviously a prayer to the moon, but for what reason or to what purpose. I suppose I'm supposed to guess. No can do. I like it layed out a little more. Oh well, still a good rhyme. GW62

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Florence P. Wordsmith 30 January 2009

I like the imagery of a trapped sun. Have you thought of publishing this?

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Leslie Ching 29 January 2009

nicely and thoughtfully written...i like your use of repetition...

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Patti Masterman 29 January 2009

This is some nice writing. I like it a lot. It is unashamedly poetic. Just beauty.

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