Monday, August 8, 2005

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I close my eyes and retreat further into my dreams.
I stand before you unabashed and wanting.
the notes and letters of love float through the air, easily dispensed, waiting to be proved.
its not that I don't trust,
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Eila Mahima Jaipaul
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Eila Mahima Jaipaul 10 August 2005

Max, Thank you for your compliment... please keep reading my work, your comments are very welcome. -Eila

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Max Reif 08 August 2005

The last line is very beautiful in the context you've created. You've set it up perfectly. You have a very literate voice. By that I mean, I sense you are conscious of what you want to say. That makes a poet, practically all by itself.

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