Saturday, July 9, 2005

Should I Comments

Rating: 4.3

Overjoyed when I finally see your name
Should I make the first move or can I count on you
The sight of your name leaves me so anxious and tempted
But I fear that you might see my message as desperate
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Madeline Fazio
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Adriana Cruz 10 July 2005

this was good but i think it would be better if you broke it up a bit, and also you kinda repeated a line that said something about how if you say something, you dont want to come off sounding desperate.i forget now. good job!

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