>Short Break Poem by Geetha Jayakumar

I am ready Start striking! .. nice feeling yes time is short to report for failure or success for sure

Geetha, wud miss u dearly!

Dinesh Sir, Thanks for the lovely comment. I am just thinking to keep this poem as it is...So that when ever I feel to break anyones head with my poems...... I can just refresh it again and again.....

Now, it is time, you may delete this comment Geetha. Your hibernation has come to an end.

Your first stanza works tremendously well. But the poem goes downhill from there. Constant repetition of the word break might have been done to introduce the effect of the poetic device but it hinders the smooth flow of the poem. The sound of the word BREAK jars after a point.

This is what I too am in need now..you have said it very interestingly...like this poem a lot- ++10

Excellent! ! ! You draw people to you! ! ! ! I imagine an encounter with you at the grocery store would be a enlivening experience! ! ! I am browsing through your poems, getting a sense of who you are and so far you charming me but my computer is not working so I shall close

It's a wonderful poem...................10

There is something in this poem that everyone sees his sentiments in it and he is constrained to like it.

Fantastic. The poem is in the modern and decent form. First stanza of the poem is more attractive.