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'The mysticism of a passionate heart'........ Tell it, friend. Esther : ]

great poem Uriah...the beauty of a drunken, depressed, angry, abused, ...poet...it is all good.........Vallerie

Yikes! This poem is permeated with abstractions. Try to make your images more concrete by invoking direct, absolute feelings from the speaker. For example, 'The mysticism of a passionate heart'. The reader is uncertain what this means, because it lacks immediate emotion. Here are more examples: ' magical vision of poetry, ' 'growing everyday into her goddess, ' 'conviction of human dignity, ' 'understand the voice of truth'. Solidify what these mean. Hey, but please don't be offended-helpful criticism will make ya stronger. Take care! ~Fil

Beautifully expressed sentiments, Uriah. I like it even if I think it's just an eensy teensy bit...wimpy. (Please don't throw a chair at me! I said I liked it! Ouch! What did you do that for?)

Sadness in her soul? That isnt a prerequisite for love, Uriah! The right one will come along sooner or later. God bless. Raynette

SAD, BUT HOPEFUL SITUATION....ALLS POSSIBLE WHEN ONE PASSIONS FOR SOMETHING OR SOMEONE HARD ENOUGH.....TIME TELLS ALL.... GREAT PIECE, U.H.....Glad to see ya on site...haven't seen you last few days '''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''FJR