She's Leaving Me (A Short Series Of Senryu) Senryu's? Senriyi? ? Comments

I'm about to use this in my upcoming May 2019 showcase of poems (see my poem titles on my site) . Thanks. bri :)

so, your daughter grew up and left? ? i'll bet you speak to her, at least on the phone! or is this about a lesbian couple? or sisters? or a man speaking of his mistress? ? to MyPoemList. bri ;)

Ho Elisabeth Excellent. Well expressed. 2nd stanza L2 needs one more syllable maybe it's.. it is Don't you hate it when we miscount. we all do. Next step is to sound as oriental as possible. Drop every un-needed word you can. As far as I know it's senryus I've only been at senryus for a month and they are fun. Remember senryus and haikus should read if possible like a fortune cookie. We strive. congratulations.