Friday, September 9, 2016

She Rests Her Eyes Upon You Softly Comments

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She did not surrender herself
Nor wear her clothing tight
She did not flirt with the mirror
Nor did she parade herself at night
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Edmund Strolis
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Unnikrishnan E S 18 September 2016

Marvelous poem, drawing a beautiful and touching picture of the lady- of her strong character. Well done. She rests her eyes upon you softly Mindful of the world around her Do I see a flicker of the Great Kaalidasa in these lines? Pravata neelolpala nirrvisesham Adheera viprekshitam aayatakshya tayaa griheetam nu mrigaanaganabhyas- tato griheetam nu mriganganabhi. (Kumara Sambhavan- describing Uma's attaining adolescence) . (Her quick glances caused her eyes to move like a blue lotus flower in a slow breeze. Wonder, whether she 'borrowed' it from the female deer or the the deer borrowed it from her!) Great work. Loved reading.10.

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Edmund Strolis 04 October 2016

Thank you for sharing the lines of the Great Kaalidasa. Such a big world full of knowledge yet to be revealed. A blue lotus flower in a slow breeze.............yes indeed. Wonderful velvet vision. The lotus and the lady transcend earthly attempts to capture their essence.

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Madathil Rajendran Nair 12 September 2016

Beautiful! In your previous poem, you just wanted a word; and now you are asking for a smile. Aren't you a little greedy, poet? Fantastic description. You have selected the images well for both poems. (10)

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