She Killed Me Comments

All ur poems make me want 2 smile n cry at the same tym. Obviously u r very talented.. i lyk ur works- keep sharing hope u r not a sad person.. do fidn smthng cheerful n write ok?

Wew..good write of you. BUT she killed you? You love she and you also will marry with she..i'thought she cannot kill you.but certainly she love and wanted marry with you: p: p: p+10 congrats great.

It had a nice flow and yes I will read it again- thanks for sharing.

This one really touched my heart... Good work Chitresh: -)

great poem, carry on writing!

A poem like this is uncommon in males and so I'll tell you this; you're a deep and real man. This poem is great. One thing I will add is that you should probably use proper spelling; 'you' not 'u'.

good poem keep up the good work

very good keep up the good work

Nice and deep poem! Keep on writting :)

This one is best of all i have read so far.....u are improving ;))

Dude it sounds like someone ripped your heart out and shoved your face in the mud on a rainy day. Then ate your heart. Harsh. but I love it! ♥

This is an example of my favourite Romance Genre: Cheap and Tawdry Romance. Brilliant genre to write in. I see this poem as a Narrative Poem; which is why, I think, this could be a great poem for Verses (or parts) . Could have done with some similes in this poem. Would have help bring out a stronger image and created a more poetic sense. Usually, similes (if used correctly) are a key element in Romance Poetry. Otherwise, it sounds quite sloppy and overdone. But that is my opinion; I hate the Romance Genre (excluding Cheap and Tawdry Romance) . Stanza 1 through to 14, can be classified as Mature Romance (or in some cases, Teen Romance) , whilst Stanzas 15 to 17 is classified as Cheap and Tawdry Romance. In my honest opinion, I really did not like this poem. Lacks a lot of emotion; until we reach the last stanza. That is when we finally feel and sense some real emotion. I think, you have tried to 'tell' us the story; instead of 'showing' us the story. Hence the lack of emotion. You can improve this poem by including a lot more figurative and emotive language. That will start you off in the editing process.

yep this pretty much is a masterpiece! great job

this poem is actually a master piece............. really herst touching!

i saw her on anothers man's lap, under a tree she was saying things to him, she never said to me i saw her finger with a new wedding ring 1 tear rolled down my cheeks and it faled on my ancestoral ring Very nice!

i really like the way you expressed yourself in this one. keep up the good work! you have great talent.

theres not much i can say on this one other than im sorry u felt that way

sad but good.. with control you be great.

Oh...one of thesad poems..but realy too hard to have this end: (...very sad for you, but hope you the best with another oone: D

Such a sad end: / Great job writing it, though