Monday, April 14, 2008

She Is The Child Comments

Rating: 4.5

I watched the children at play.
Their very essence of innocence.
They began to stare.
They were aware of my pressence.
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Rayniece D. Clayborne
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Cathy King 22 May 2008

So far, this one is my favorite of all your poems! You really packed a punch into the last line, the way the best ones do. Good job Rayniece.

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Darnetta Locker 15 April 2008

i like this peom, it has has you woundering and like the person it was the last line that was the topper.

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Greenwolfe 1962 14 April 2008

I thought the last line was wonderful. Never doubt the impact of the last line. GW62

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