Dwelling with her uncertain situation, ..............is the speaker/I or the population doing the dwelling?
i would tend to use Dwelling upon/on her uncertain situation,
Many wonder is she survived, ..................do you mean 'Many wonder if she will survive'..........hmm? you ARE the poet. i am but the reader, so perhaps you know better than i what you wish/mean to say. :) :)
All we need to do is to shoe affection, .............shoe or show? ? affection to whom?
i wonder, on rare occasions, how the people of the world (many at least) manage to do so well at surviving. but i suppose many do not do much more than survive. their lives may be more negative than positive. and if that is true, i wonder why more people don't kill themselves. maybe some turn to killing others instead of themselves, in pursuit of a better life?
250 tribal groups! holy cow! ('slang exclamation' showing surprise/astonishment) .
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i do not believe in God, though i did until around your age. God (the belief in it) can serve a very useful purpose, if only to give hope to some. but, if there really is a God, and God really 'loves' mankind ['made in His own image so the bible says], why does He/She/It allow so much suffering? and i don't want to hear sin or a test of faith or God moves in mysterious ways! ! !
but good luck with your poetry, and good luck to Nigeria, and welcome to PoemHunter.
bri :)
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Dwelling with her uncertain situation, ..............is the speaker/I or the population doing the dwelling? i would tend to use Dwelling upon/on her uncertain situation, Many wonder is she survived, ..................do you mean 'Many wonder if she will survive'..........hmm? you ARE the poet. i am but the reader, so perhaps you know better than i what you wish/mean to say. :) :) All we need to do is to shoe affection, .............shoe or show? ? affection to whom? i wonder, on rare occasions, how the people of the world (many at least) manage to do so well at surviving. but i suppose many do not do much more than survive. their lives may be more negative than positive. and if that is true, i wonder why more people don't kill themselves. maybe some turn to killing others instead of themselves, in pursuit of a better life? 250 tribal groups! holy cow! ('slang exclamation' showing surprise/astonishment) . - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - i do not believe in God, though i did until around your age. God (the belief in it) can serve a very useful purpose, if only to give hope to some. but, if there really is a God, and God really 'loves' mankind ['made in His own image so the bible says], why does He/She/It allow so much suffering? and i don't want to hear sin or a test of faith or God moves in mysterious ways! ! ! but good luck with your poetry, and good luck to Nigeria, and welcome to PoemHunter. bri :)