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‘…the only time i cried // was when humanity died ‘ Very touchy and moving line. Ten++ dr.sakti

с п а с и б о з а п р е д л о ж е н и е п р о ч е с т ь т в о и р а б о т ы ! н а с а м о м д е л е о ч е н ь х о р о ш о , к р а с и в о и в р и ф м у . з н а е ш ь , к о г д а м ы Р о с с и я н е т в о р и м н е н а р у с с к о м я з ы к е а н а , к п р и м е р у , а н г л и й с к о м , н а с в с е г д а о т л и ч а е т р у с с к а я л ю б о в ь к р и ф м е , к м а г и и с л о в и в ы р а ж е н и й ... т е б е у д а л о с ь с о б л ю с т и з а к о н ы р и ф м ы , м н е о ч е н ь п о н р а в и л о с ь

Strong emotion here! Good poem overall!

Words have a sad sensitivity

the first stanza was, unfortunately, not my favorite. i do very much enjoy the ending of the second stanza though. overall, i enjoy this piece.

the grief is intense and i am glad you used the female gender to express the demise of humanity. Not to say anything negative about the male gender but humanity bear, deliver and raise the human race from inception to birth...thanks for the invite...

emotional poem very good

a very touching poem..a well expressed emotion and well versed...good poem...

i can't say it was the best but it was good to read i'll give you a two thums up on it keep up the good work...10

That was beautiful. You seduced me. At first, i thought it was a simple love poem until i reached the end. it was intense. It's so sad to say that it does seem at times like humanity is dying. The piece flowed very easy. pleasing ot the ears. great stuff.

I feel the grief of the poem..so sad

I do not know who are you griefinf for but I can felt the sadness when I read it.

i liked it it really made me think i felt like i new what you were feeling by writing it...but im not sure but i really liked it..=]

this really nice. i enjoy reading it.. strong! !

Touching..powerful words! The words slashes through! You'll ask for more as you read!

wow..nicely written..i like the way u connect the words together and how u make them rhyme...great job!

wow thats awesome....and deep...sweet

that was great....u organized the sentences very nicely...

Its great, the way you personified humanity as 'she' really made the poem come to life, there is so much emotion.

Interesting perspective on humanity. I like.9