Shattered Time Comments

nothing lacking in this poem....great work! love starr

I can't suggest a title Logan, but I am envious of your loss of pride, and the results in this beautiful poem, it is such a holding back and destructive emotion, when it's gone, it's all up imo. Excellent write, so close to humanities bone, it hurt to read, shards and all. I loved the middle stanza's especially, what a great way of stopping time. It is easy when you don't mind. Smiling at you, Tai