Sunday, May 31, 2009

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The rain reminds me of my tears
With each dropp that falls, brings so many fears
The past is the past and will always remain
It will always be there to bring back the pain
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Jane Allen
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Stephen Stirk 12 June 2009

Very good content, and I like the way the rythmn and rhyme flow through it. There was just one or two line length issues that may be easily corrected. Most Enjoyable Steve

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