Shadows In The Dark Comments

I thought for sure it was “spectors”, but I guess I was thinking of spectators! “Is my fear up in a tree To look up as I may see” ……….. I WANT to switch the positions of these two lines, but it is YOUR poem! ………………………………………………….. oh well. : ( “Or the crack upon next I tread Or carnivorous vines that I dread Will it cause mothers back to break Or a quick snack of me they make” ………and here I’m tempted to move the lines so the rhyming is ………………………………………………………….. tread, break, dread, make ……what do you think? :) favorite part so far: “Stairs that creek under my feet In my chest pounding heart beat Echoing loudly in my ears Trembling eyes swelling with tears” …………….poor baby! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! on the stairs AGAIN? this IS suspenseful! “miry”? a new word to me, though I think I’ve heard mire. favorite line so far: “Upon my neck stand straight my hairs” nice job with the rhyming in this poem, as I would EXPECT from you! GOTCHA! not “creeks” ……….creeks are streams, brooks, and whatnot! :) “creak krēk/ verb verb: creak; 3rd person present: creaks; past tense: creaked; past participle: creaked; gerund or present participle: creaking 1. 1. (of an object, typically a wooden one) make a harsh, high-pitched sound when being moved or when pressure or weight is applied. the stairs creaked as she went up them synonyms: squeak, grate, rasp; More groan, complain the rusty gate creaked in the wind 2. 2. show weakness or frailty under strain. stock prices creaked to a mixed finish today noun noun: creak; plural noun: creaks 1. 1. a harsh scraping or squeaking sound. the creak of a floorboard broke the silence “ **************now, DARLA, WHEN YOU GET SOME FREE TIME, it will be your turn to find some of MY ‘typos’ (again!) . very cute ending! how about a whiskey sour? IT'S SWEET! bri :) to MyPoemList and also into “Section B” of the showcase for PH poets on my PH site. thanks, and have a great Halloween.

This is phenomenal...that last line....truly, a great release. Well done. A 10.

..great use of rhyming words.... nice

This is sublime. I find the title very interesting. well written, keep up the good work.