Shadows Comments

My soul is deep, just like my bed. So deep I don't even realize what's underneath it. It could be a storm, like a hurricane. Like opening a book, I start to unfold. To eventually tell you all my secrets, because I can't hold it in anymore. Nice lines of opening.I enjoyed them. Some beautiful lines are.. As a shadow, you stare into my eyes, And wonder who I am. I can keep it in, but I won't. You'll be like a diary And a very nice ending with a touch of kindness from a tender heart. Thank you dear poetess. It deserves 10++ Subhas

From my last poem, i received some negative comments about it. Feel free to list some improvements if you would like! But i wouldn't want to receive comments that judge my poems please! ! ! -Emily,12