The light we once had has
now turned into the darkest
shade of gray - has painted
a picture that would envy
...
Read full text
This is very good, may I make a suggestion? The opening stanza, and the following verse, are really captivating, however somehow the length seems to take the beauty away from the beginning of the poem.... Very good none the less.... Only a suggestion, I welcome all, as I am sure you do... Regrards Bonnie
This seems much better, as I can now focus on the exucute much better... It is a nice piece of work filled with much bitter/emotions due to love that has turned sour... Very nicely done... Bonnie