Seven Windows A Tale Of The Future Comments

Your novel-like poetry is amazing! Introducing characters, giving them an attention grabbing background/personality.It's so much like reading a thrilling book, but without so many pages. Once more you say so much with so little and assult my mind with questions-which I adore! I especially like the question of what would a wronged man do if given a gun with two bullets... Very interesting thing to think about. Much like what I had tried to address with my poem 'Justice'. Only yours is WAY better. Amazing job, Mr.Daniel! -SOH

.........oh I love this write....this is like chapter one...the beginning of a great novel....and you kept me on the edge of my seat....I loved reading every stanza and now I wish to read more....I must ask, have you written a novel? ? ? ? ?

What a grim scene! but so vividly painted I feel as if I was there seated at the dreary banquet table myself. My poems are usually quite short, but I must say I really appreciate the amount of detail rendered by a poem of this length. The scene you set was simply marvelous~ I also enjoyed the placement of breaks between verses. For example, the lines He must be lonelier than the ghosts of those he killed. and It's as if I entertained myself out of thoughts of despair or suicide. really created an element of surprise that otherwise wouldn't have existed in the poem. That in itself was very refreshing. Another part that really struck me were the lines: We are savages with big brains reduced to living in stale sludge. Very impressive and evocative language, I must say. Also the ending lines for me were very stirring. I love the idea of one's soul hearing something inaudible to the flesh. Sort of makes me wonder if I've had any such moments. Anyhow, you've outdone yourself with this one :) great write! Nika~

Although framed as a revelation of the future, perhaps even a reincarnation of St. Augustine, this poem feels more like a personal note to yourself saying how disappointed you are in the way things have turned out so far in your own life. If so, let me dissuade you from this melancholy fantasy. You reach out to others and truly give of yourself, give from the heart all the time. Your poetry to speaks volumes about the quality of your soul. When you sit quietly in the silence, listening for something to believe in, be really quiet and try ot hear the echos of your own voice coming at you from all sides. You may think that that is just white noise because it carries your genetic code, but really Daniel it's much more. Break out the bubbly boy! You are loved!