Monday, February 9, 2009

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The smell of pine trees, sawdust, coffee, bacon, love
The sound of a rusty chain on a front porch swing, creaky screen door, footsteps on a hardwood floor, leaky faucet, love
The feel of a summer breeze, warm hug, soft touch, hand stitched quilt, love
The sight of a foot pedal sewing machine, cob webs, large print Reader’s Digest, peeling paint, love
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Greenwolfe 1962 24 February 2009

This is a wonderful piece of writing. It reminds me of a couple of my poems. LIFE'S COMPANION and LOVE . I like the line closings of 'love' and 'fear.' And I especially liked the end word of 'Forgiveness.' That word ties it all together. This writing may be hard for some to understand. I wouldn't understand it either if the end line words weren't there. They make all understanding possible. GW62

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Eyan Desir 10 February 2009

nice follow good work nice poem

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