Senryu- Time Comments

Lovely senryu on time..

A senryu that makes an old man sad, here comes the hope, hope of another life after death. Well, let this hope be a faith and face death smiling.

Time moves with fizzling like granules of sand funneled into deeper chasms. Wonderful imaginary. Beautiful senryu. Thanks.

Excellent Senryu! Love the choice of words.

An hourglass came immediately to my mind, doing exactly as you put it; as time fizzled out. I wonder if they are still being used? Thanks Valsa.

Lovely....very intelligent expression....funnelled into deeper chasms time moves fizzling out beautifully strung words...kudos Valsa.....love this senryu a lot....thank you

A great senryu about a theme that makes people stressed.The passing of time.

Thought provoking write!

Lovely haiku about the time,10

Time is never lost as memories live on eternally, great write!

Sizzling sand fizzles as time. Beautiful.