Saturday, August 18, 2018

Senryu 27 Series (Victory) Comments

Rating: 5.0

A desire to win
Demands a constant search for
An adversary.
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Savita Tyagi
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Muzahidul Reza 02 September 2018

A series of well penned Senryu on victory you have fantastically shared here, who does not desire for victory? but for it need deeds, thanks for sharing,10

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Kumarmani Mahakul 31 August 2018

I would rather face My vices as enemy Than the world outside. ‘Cause beating myself Is in my hands but not a Beating of this world.......so touching and true. A great philosophical poem nicely executed.10

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Edmund Strolis 31 August 2018

This sentiment especially in this time of constant incivility is so very true. We can shock those around us by failing to react. A humble nature these days speak loudly. To pull the world down in order to lift ourselves up is an illusion. We all go down as a result. I appreciate this writing for the message conveyed. Wonderful.....

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Bri Edwards 23 August 2018

thanks for poem and Poet's Notes! i especially enjoyed the first 3; 1 & 2 i liked best. to MyPoemList. Unlike Savita's vices, MY vices are SO BAD that i'd take my chances against the world instead! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ‘Cause Winning myself..i'd substitute ..Beating myself......[NOT beating myself up! ]...for...Winning myself. [syllable count stays the same] i'm not sure of the meaning of last senyru. oops! Senryu! bri :)

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Savita Tyagi 30 August 2018

Thanks Bri for your comment and suggestion. I didn’t like the word winning myself too much. Though meaning is same it had a little too much weight but couldn’t think of anything else at that time. Now I have edited it with your suggestion.

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Valsa George 21 August 2018

A profound truth! Only when there is an adversary, our bench marks will go up or else we will stay in a self complacent mood! Wisely put!

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Savita Tyagi 30 August 2018

Thank you Walsa for giving an uplift to competitive spirit of the poem with your comment.

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Khairul Ahsan 20 August 2018

So much said and so much left to be perceived by self introspection, in so few words! 10/10.

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Savita Tyagi 30 August 2018

Thank you so much. Your comment fits so well for the last Senryu.

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Savita Tyagi 30 August 2018

Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment Khairul Ahsen.

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 19 August 2018

A very incisive and thought provoking succinct write. Great brevity, Savita. 10++++

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Savita Tyagi 30 August 2018

Thank you Rose for your comment.

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Savita Tyagi 18 August 2018

Yes Kelly you are right. I intended to write more Senryu to that effect but got busy. Only now I have been able to compose them so adding them in comment. I thank you for your comment. I would rather face My vices as enemy Than the world outside. ‘Cause Winning myself Is in my hands but not a winning of this world

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Kelly Kurt 18 August 2018

The adversary can be yourself. A profound Senryu.

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Khairul Ahsan 20 August 2018

Excellent observation, Kelly!

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Dr Dillip K Swain 18 August 2018

However, desire to win by a fashionable king or a tormented/tortured soldier remains to be comprehended! A very insightful piece of work!

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Dr Dillip K Swain 18 August 2018

A wonderful reflection! A beautiful Senryu dear madam....................................................10

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