Senryu.2. Glassware Comments

A vivid depiction of shattered dreams and hard life in just three brilliant lines. Deeply poignant yet beautifully crafted senryu.

Verily, a lovely three liner narrating the depth of feeling.....10

Oh valsa! hope not. Those three lines did bleed me. Read it three times.

This is the feeling of a person so nicely depicted. Beautiful poem....10

Nice poem. A lot of thanks to you. Be well always.

My dreams always disappear into thin air. Your dreams seem to be solid. Beautifully put in the poem.

A nice painting, I want to write two lines of an unknown Urdu poet, but the problem is this that you don't understand Urdu, anyway i shall try to translate it- - - - - Na jane kaisi phir aag bhdke na jane kaysi qymat aaye+++Shikaste sheesha ka aysa manzar jo sheeshagar ki nazar se guzre (If the accident of breaking of glass flower pot would have been seen by a pot maker, even a greater tragedy might have happened) . Valsa it's a beautiful three liner, one of the best from you.........10

Superb, Great imagery and nice thought but sad ending...I liked it.

Sad but I know it's not true. Well thought out and expressed.-10

This is how I feel. Wonderfully written

Dreams are like exquisite pieces of glassware unless they encounter the harsh realities of life only to be smashed into bits. What a nice poem. Thanks.

Ah me! What happened? Hope it is only some glassware broken.