Self-Portrait Comments

What a lovely and original, self-portrait! Artistically and sentimentally gorgeous, sincere and perfect.

Dunna worry 'dear' too much what others say... if they can they will.. if they do they have.. and the metaphoric juicers.. can and will.. just squeeze them harder...iip

what a beautiful portrait! painted with honesty.....

I like the last two lines of the first stanza and the first two lines of the third stanza because the end rhymes effortlessly between each pair. The ongoing metaphor of color to represent states of mind unifies the poem well.

Terri....., I'd say it was a 'good read' for the most part. I noticed that all your rhymes were strong and perfect except for 'faith' & 'underneath'...., which threw me off a little. I personally don't mind it, and although I still sometimes do it myself...., the consistent rhyme scheme seems to be a little dated now. Check out some legendary poets....., I'm talking about the GREATS and try patterning your writing more after theirs. Send my best regards to Liz. Keep at it, you've got the talent. Best regards, Trade.