no more being a user and feeling like a loser in life
i might step up in the light
but my minds on a different path tonight
words are out of sight
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ya have written very subtly and with frankness...deep emotional turmoil...winnie
You did an awesome job in showing how disconnected one can feel from our body. I mean that how sometimes our body is present, but our mind is somewhere else. The only thing that I would reccomend is to try and finish it off. I mean, I love the direction you were headed in, you kept getting deeper and I loved it. But I sort of feel like you kinda left it hanging. I'm only trying to give you constructive criticism, please don't take it the wrong way. I love the way you write. Once again, love your style.
exactlly what i said before. you are truely amazing. i relate to every one of your pieces. specially this one! ! ! !
amazing wrote poem keep up the worko
This is a well writen peice I loved it. I understand what its like to to not trust anyone even my own family.I have been in foster care since i was three years old. Its hard to trust people that dont follow through and dont show they care. U will sooner later overcome that fear and start trusting people. u are amazing writer. Uve got potential and can do anything u set ur mind to. U have just got to believe in urself. Uve got to start out small and work urself to the top. ur truely krystal
this is beautiful! I love the way it all just flows together!
You can really feel the poem build up in its intensity and its yearning for answers. I also love the flow and wonderful imagery to bring to connect your audience.
pure true and full of feelings i do really love everything u have written. its not just entertainment its mind altering for anyone who can understand what ur really writing. i believe im one of those people. i feel like a deeper people for having read ur work. thank you for sharing ur gift with everyone who wants to enjoy it. dont ever stop im totally serious
Really good........ great use of words felt the emotions did no want it to stop very smooth writing! Asia Jay
all i gotta is DAM! ! ! ! you did a very good job this piece was more then poetic outstanding i should say...... i know exactly how you feels about trust but you see trust is something a lot of people don't take seriously unlike us.... love your poem updat me on new poetry whenever you can