Schism Comments

Is it wrong that the last few lines made me laugh out loud?

Their remaining together is it laziness or the fun of the battle... Excellent story telling... Alison

i second lea, roman candle libido is a phrase for the ages... along with frozen butterflies. Excellent as usual, depressing as always. Cheers, MS

You are an incredible storyteller. The roman candle libido is a fab turn of phrase. Bravo.

Saw it coming. Made me smirk.

Wonderfully dark and aptly descriptive. Cannibalism is a great way to hide the body. You'll have to cook lots of chili, but it's nice when your partner can make you feel all warm and satisfied like that. -chuck

The first three lines sum up the degeneration, the rest of this marvellously penned piece takes us insightfully and wittily through from external observations and hypotheses to the internal coldness and plotting of two people we probably all know... wonderful, detailed, rather eery, commentary on the transition. Scarily common, methinks, but rarely articulated so engagingly. Grand! t x

Fishing wire accross the top of the stairs. Not that I'd ever consider such a thing. But it's nearly invisible... Hugs Anna xxx