Monday, June 27, 2016

Scars Of War Comments

Rating: 5.0

Our swollen faces
have become dashboards of our miseries,
The wounds may heal
but the scars will remind us still
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Edward Dzonze
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Pamela Sinicrope 27 June 2016

'We cry, we continue to die Our swollen faces have become dashboards of our miseries' This is a very compelling bit of writing. I don't know that the poetry need go higher...just deeper. Keep exploring your feelings and experiences and bear witness so that others can understand. Well written and nice use of repetition in your lines as well as metaphor and simile. Thanks for sharing.

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