Save Myself Comments

I thought i was beside.....; i could actually feel what you felt....written rather neatly and in pictures rather than words; Berhan, this is painting, the composition, the perspective and the combination of (colors) words are great;

Great drama here and very cleverly written; the short breathless lines are just right to convey the writer's desperate, panicky feeling. You make the reader identify and feel like he/she is standing there quaking in your shoes :)

great poem berhan, nobody puts the fear of god into you than your mum...

huh that was neat! i was waiting and waiting and then BANG the end ;) nice work