Sunday, June 23, 2013

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Rating: 2.5

It starts with a name,
then comes a tear,
it doesn't take long,
to develop your fear.
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zara williams
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Kristina Stockamp 23 June 2013

Very moving! I really like the rhythm of this piece, but the 6th stanza doesn't flow well with the other stanza's. Maybe rewrite or remove?

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