Wednesday, March 18, 2015

Sanctuary Comments

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In the park
just before dark
the birds are
chirping all around me
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Nika McGuin
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Daniel Brick 21 March 2015

EMERALD DUSK and FRAGRANT MARCH AIR - two lovely images of early spring at the end of the third stanza, and the end of the poem? I want it to end there and not include the b-u-g-s. Put them in another poem, and you can call it The Exterminator. But this poem called aptly SANCTUARY is complete in three stanzas. The extreme sensory sensitivity - you can hear leaves, babies' whimpers, an ant - deserves closure. OK, all your bugs off the set. We're going for a three-stanza evocation of the sweetness of spring!

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