Sailor Comments

Hi, Eman. Reading this, I felt some cosmic emotions. (I love to feel those!) The 'sailor on the seas of life' theme naturally brings them up in a reader, unless a poet crushes them somehow. And you let them come through. The 'smile and a memory' linger with me palpably as landmarks on life's vast journey, as I come away from the poem. The device you use at the end works (I think other poets have used it, but if it comes originally from you now, it's authentic) . I get authentic emotions and a sense of vastness and the human struggle (for, as you say, salvation) from your poem. I think the power of your feelings and images may come through more purely, and with fewer restrictions, if you try dispensing with rhyme.