Sachbee (My Friend) Comments

Shimon, this is a great piece of writing. The images that you capture throughout are skillfully woven into this poem. It would have been easy to have knocked out a 'tell-it-as-it-is' dirge but you have, to your great credit, avoided this. The repitition of the image of sweets as a placater is brilliant, you have created a sort of childlike approach to a grown up issue and the last couplet is beautifully placed.