~ Rupturing Hymen [a.K.A. Defloration] ~ Comments

The rise and fall of (mount) ...O...Lips...pus...minds...know not...fear...nor pleasure...for emotion of need and need... the higher plane see...the turnnel version of...pleasure in life...forgetting that was (THE) resting place of life...I love you for sharing what is a world genocide for the personal garden...of fresh flowers...my hat off to you/Nivedta...germaine greer...a woman like yourself...

Hmm quite a lustral of the old way is presented and the poor devirgination of a beautiful flower unready to be plucked from the moist soil... the demons from the apiary have been pollinating poor polly! ! ! Jus Primae Noctis! ? Hmm is that not the old medieval right of the lord of the manor to sleep with the bride of his servants and peasants? Do such things still exist in the civilised world? I ruddy well hope not? ? ! ! ! Very powerful poetic piece this with coitus quiddity thrown in to make us stop and think about man and woman, rank, society and how peevish the world can be in its fickle existence of the humanity that it sustains. Previous pervious natures will be banned from future civilisations? Damned lustful animals will make sure that it won't be! ! ! Sort them out Niv!

dear poet why it is referred to as defloration? Good old Niv - original as usual and vehemently vocal in most tribes the bridal bedsheet is displayed next morning signifying the culmination of this primal ritual that causes life long scars- there has to be a more civilised way to do this unholy act warm regards ss bakshi

dear poet why it is referred to as defloration? Good old Niv - original as usual and vehemently vocal in most tribes the bridal bedsheet is displayed next morning signifying the culmination of this primal ritual that causes life long scars- there has to be a more civilised way to do this unholy act warm regards ss bakshi

======================================== ** ORIGINAL MESSAGE ******************** ======================================== From: Susanta Pattnayak To: Nivedita [poet Under Threat Of Editorial Cannibalism Date-Time: 9/24/2012 10: 02: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00) Subject: Re: Re: Re: RUPTURING HYMEN [a.k.a. DEFLORATION] ~ niv ~ UK ---------- I like the poem and the thought put behind every word of the poem. I like it in more than one way...Well written, very impressive, very different and a very powerful voice...I'd love to join the band-wagon of 'mass spiting'.. and i don't know.. if 'Kicking whapping bashing on Twin balls [OO]' are the only (and the only) option left to end the perversity.. Yes I'm with it too! Regards, Susanta Dear Nivedita (niv) , In reply to your message, I cite one of my poems written on a similar context. ' Unzipped lips unsealed tongue profound the truth likewise profuse the love. Kiss her nifty lips, truthfully, without pretension and relish the divinity. Say honestly, without awe Your word, to the world you ought to say and never hold but applaud, that is nicely and wisely said. ' Regards Susanta. == == Posted thru courtesy of AB London n

======================================== ** ORIGINAL MESSAGE ******************** ======================================== From: Louis Borgo To: Nivedita [poet Under Threat Of Editorial Cannibalism Date-Time: 9/22/2012 7: 23: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00) Subject: Louis Borgo on your poems ---------- i rad your poems an i understand where you come rom you speak of rape alot. i agree with one write on your page it is still a few good men and that isthe meaning of my poems. bt i so many ways to say you know. you could give the audition a sense of the natural of rape with oit saying it the word rape and lt them feel wat you feel, notice what younotice you would connection to more reader because they understand what is to be rape. i thiink when you found the way connection to your audience with this maybe poetr yi the beginning of how to get you message across maybe it more you can do.....just a comment. == Posted thru courtesy of AB London n

======================================== ** ORIGINAL MESSAGE ******************** ======================================== From: Kelly Seale To: Nivedita [poet Under Threat Of Editorial Cannibalism Date-Time: 9/4/2012 1: 40: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00) Subject: on Rupturing Hymen (AKA Defloweration) ... ---------- Powerful indeed. The message is there, underneath the pain and injustice. I hope you have not experienced this firsthand, but if yes, you need healing and talk to help. pls feel free to communicate with me on this or other subjects. I have many poems posted and would love to share. I am a happy and compassionate man and good friend. Good Ink here, I'll have to read more from you. -kELLY. == Posted thru courtesy of AB London n

Dark................but a Gutsy poem

Madam Nivedita, Your poems are very true and justified no doubt. You have given all detailed narration in brief through your poem. I liked it very much. I wish you the best of luck! Sushil Kumar

Yes.. We agree in issue.. Rape is heinous and who ever did this act.. should be torture to death. Why I said so.. one time act is actually destroy entire life of woman. Thanks for sharing with us you opinion and we are against gender violence...

Prateep, below, might be right. (Is might always right?) Nivedita your poems are quite hard to read sympathetically - though I agree that rape is an abomination. Have mercy on your readers - someone gave me this particularly good piece of advice. Sad but true: people read mostly for pleasure. If there is no pleasure in the reading - and I must temper this by saying some of your wordplay tickles me - people won't want to read your poems. Please don't think I am the enemy here. I believe you have a good heart and are trying to say something worthwhile. And I thank you.

While I always appreciate the boldness in your poems, somewhere I feel that there is a growing unresolved hatred in your last few poems. I notice a similarity with Taslima Nasreen. Please do not let the fire in you mis-directed, as it finally happened with Taslima - always accusing the male. Darkness is all around us, but we should even miss the little candle burning and trying to fight the darkness.

great composition...

Powerful and thought-provoking. Sent this to the women in my life.

it's really a nice poem. I like it...... so what catigory of the poem is this? free verse? I actually understand that the poem is talking about the oppressed woman, a woman who is vulnerable to men. thus very wonerful of you. concetrate on the tone!

I see the point and im on ur side. But i must say that it is a lil hard to understand since im not a fan Of big words yet. But still message is clear.

rape, the crime against women has been continuing since ages... man appears to have advanced /become civilized? ? but somehow the physically defenceless continue to bear the brunt... a united voice should at least sensitize society against such atrocities... voice well raised!

======================================== ** ORIGINAL MESSAGE ******************** ======================================== From: Akhil Arya To: Nivedita [poet Under Threat Of Editorial Cann Date-Time: 10/27/2012 2: 43: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00) Subject: A message to the Hon'able poetess, ---------- Ms. Nivedita I whole heartedly appriciate your efforts against the social evil in side the society, your poems showcase the sufferings of victims and the fear of every girl but inspite there is a desire to end this practise of rape and by whole respect I salute you and your poems. === Posted by courtesy of AB London

======================================== ** ORIGINAL MESSAGE ******************** ======================================== From: Gulsher John To: Nivedita [poet Under Threat Of Editorial Cannibalism Date-Time: 10/25/2012 10: 31: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00) Subject: Re: RUPTURING HYMEN [a.k.a. DEFLORATION] ~ niv ~ UK ---------- ya it happens but if you remember by nature we are all animal, there are very few who sense huminity, but please please do research and find out why such happens? who is responsible? male or female? i think you might have good understanding of human instincts. and i am with you === Posted thru courtesy of AB London

congrats for the brave attempt..keep writing please..