Friday, May 17, 2013
Rude Awakening Comments
Rating: ★3.5
How long would it take before the veil would drop?
How long before the bubble burst?
Her perfect world is crumbling right before her eyes
She can do nothing but watch it crash
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Addy Adenawo
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Aftab Alam Khursheed
17 May 2013
Rude awakening yet there is hope left for betterment a nice poem well penned
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Gajanan Mishra
17 May 2013
a love that was never her, good love. I invite you to read my poems and comment.
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11/5/2025 10:44:59 PM # 1.0.0
I think this was a pretty good poem. You might want to considering breaking the first line in the third stanza possibly at scarred. The long line tends to interrupt the rhythm for me at least. I think your strongest line was the third line in the second stanza. Very nice.