Sunday, July 22, 2012

Rock, Paper, Scissors Comments

Rating: 5.0

Scissors cuts paper
my lines now scattered letters-
Left alone
to stagger
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Robin Bennett
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Maged Habib 23 July 2012

Full of images, full of pain. very heartfelt really. Why don't you try focusing on scales and rhyme scheme? I think you will surprise yourself, nothing makes a poem complete more than music in word matching and scale perfection :)

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