Thursday, March 30, 2017

Robbery Comments

Rating: 5.0

On opening the door
Greeted by a gun
With shouts of down
The nightmare had begun
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Tom Allport
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Susan Williams 10 April 2017

Those first two lines are a tutorial in how to write an opening that is guaranteed to keep the reader reading [or flying to the nearest safe room].. How to write a frightening piece in a succinct and powerful way. I think I will go take a sedative now... ;)

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Annette Aitken 09 April 2017

The reading of this sends shivers down my spine, which is happening a little to often thses days. nicely written. Annette

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Make Shift 03 April 2017

Very well written...one is left holding your breath.

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