You bleed pain like a hemophiliac with a slit wrist.
I try to add loving pressure but you resist.
You bleed on everyone around you forcing onto them your pain.
You don't care who you bleed around.
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Loved the metaphor here, rivers relating to pain, body and city. can be interpretted many ways. Good one; D
Excellent Visual and visceral. You need to find an agent who can help you get your writing out