Ride The Wave Comments

You have one stunning line that raises your poem out of doldrums in affirmation: YOU ARE YOUR SOUL, AND YOUR SOUL IS FREE. A line like that at the very end of the poem is like Marlowe's line IS THIS THE FACE THAT LAUNCHED A THOUSAND SHIPS because it could (should?) launch a thousand poems. The force need for this triumph is expressed a few lines earlier: YOU WILL LOVE THE OCEAN AGAIN. Embrace your fear, so to speak, and turn negative into positive energy. Your poem is charged by the energy of passages like this one YOU BEGIN TO SEE THE BEAUTY (And then an example of that restorative beauty :) THE PALE SUN RISING THROUGH THE FOG, etc. That imagery - b0th the observation and articulation in a poem are restorative activities. Unless, of course, you want to stretch out further to capture some elusive feature of poetry you can exploit.