Ride The Rays And Come To Me..The Melody Comments

nicely written poem expressing desire to meet the mate

A well written poem about love and expression of love.. Thanks for sharing..

poetic indeed... deserving to be in the top 500... no flaws... no errors.. yup the best!

very nice really :) keep it up... i like ur style

Just a corker of a poem...a cork holding in champange of words a melody of bubbles with love ++++10 regards

The melody, you and me say it again and let it rain LOVE TO ME, In the castle, above the sea, waiting the blue.. waiting the white, waiting the boat, IT IS VERY TOUCHING POEM, AND AMAZING WRITE

So beautiful..Very romantic piece..Love it soooomuch, Tamara Love♥ ♥ ♥ Meggie

'Ride the rays and come to me the heart, you gain' Rachel Ann Butler

This is a marvalous poem Tamara and coming from me that is saying something as I usally avoid LOVE POEMS like the plague.--10

Great visualizations. How true the premise.

beautifull love poem......well done 10+

Words passionate as flames of fire are expressed beautifully.

your passion for another is like fire :) good poem

WOW TaMaRa! what a beautiful poem! so romantic! the flow of words makes it so so sweet!

The poem is like a dream...... the way you write is beautiful, unique.

Tamara - this poem is real challenge to the heart and to the mind! In its form, in its language, in its rhyme - it is raw, dymnamic and straight from the heart. The TRIPLETS give it a driving rhythm: waiting the blue - waiting the white - waiting the boat you to float - to climb the castle - to kill the ogre the soul in pain - reduce the strain - and live in me it is the fate - you are the soul - she is the mate The SEPARATED LINES (MONOLINES) slow you down and make us consider your emotive questions: why to hesitate? it is your fate being me on my tears stop to skate (a very powerful monoline) At the end you treat us to a series of 'rhyme linked doublets rising to a fulfilment and a sensual climax: her place above - flower above tree soar with her - she is the bee come on date - why wait where is the great - find key The invitation is followed by the consumation: The MELODY you AND me she os yours - you are hers TOGETHER YOU............. A MELODY! Initially separated and then COMING TOGETHER in a beautiful climax. A true love poem - so emotionally expressed - 10 all the way!

very imaginative.well written and romantic. almost like a fairy tale made into poetry. i enjoyed it very much. i look forward to having time to read your other work. jen

Romantic and highly original Tamara. As everyone else has mentioned there is great imagery in it too! Well done. 10 love Karin

Hot stuff, no doubt about it!

Very beautiful and rare poem