Residential Presidential Bully Bully In A Mirror- - - (A Rippled Mirror Haynaku) Comments
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Bullying seen all over the world! ! ! Mankind on earth. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
Interesting. I have never tried it. The word effect certainly bears a lot of weight.
Do try it, Savita. It really makes you take an intense tour through your vocabulary! ! ! ! ! And for us word lovers, it's a lot of fun
Again Very Powerful And Effective Wording Here! ! ! ! ! .. Forgive me though, i don't think i follow on the ripple, and the exact... But, As Said, Your Words Are Ever So Powerful! ! ! ! ! ... As Always! ! ! ! ! ... Endless 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! +++++
Oh, the ripple thing is how the creator of this poetic form saw a reflection in a mirror- -distorted a little, reversed, not exact. Kind of like a mirror image in a fun house. Thus I wrote the reflection of the first tercet as- -] voice hectoring nastiness/face scowling / meanness.... instead of merely copying exactly the first tercet-
Bullay Bullay Susan Williams, I read this poem, I closed my eyes, I saw Donald Trump, I enjoyed his words, I opened my eyes, I repeated my words, Bullay Bullay! Now I let you know the magic hidden in your poem.
Hahahaha. I must warn the readers- Do not Close Your Eyes After Reading This Poem- You Might Have Nightmares! ! ! ! Hope you enjoyed this poem any way! hehehe
This new creation of yours, Susan - a rippled mirror Haynaku is a step up and above the residential presidential bully bully. i liked the way you have cleverly woven and reversed the words of Haynaku to make it more effective and interesting. I am learning a lot from you Susan, to create short poems, full of meaning and much more attractive than long drawn poems. A full score for you, dear friend.
Thank you! ! ! I agree - -this is a lot better than the plain Bully Bully one. I thought it had more strength to do the rippled image Haynaku...but I have tried several others now and I have not done well But I shall not give up! ! ! ! ! ! ! I hope you give the Ripple a try, I think you would do much better than I did. Since I tend to be long-winded I try to write short, terse, and succinct forms of poetry more often! !
New and interesting format. Some time short forms are so effective.
I think so too, Savita. I have a habit of meandering around trying to say what I want to say so these short forms of poetry are very instructive for me, forcing me to be concise and brief and so selective of my words instead of being Faulkner-ish! hehehe
a poem of great observations that sadly are true he is the kind of bully everyone should shoo? ..........well penned Susan
hahahahahahahaha... indeed he should be shooed.... hopefully in the next election! Thank you for the comment, friend Tom
Haynaku demonstrated by Kumaramani sir is totally new to most of us! Yet it is a liberal and unrestricted way of expressing our thoughts in a terse way and easy to experiment with! Susan, you have not only tried it with great effect but also have further innovated on an innovation! There lies the true ingenuity! The title- A rippled Mirror Haynaku- you have given is excellent and the poem reflects the rippling scowl of a mean face! The range and scope of poetry keeps expanding! A huge 10
Wow, Valsa! ! ! Thank you, thak you, thank you! ! ! I take no credit for the Rippled Mirror Haynaku form but I am very intrigued with it.... Yes, let us all taste the range and scope of poetry and expand on it! ! ! Even if we don't allow it into our stable of tried and true, I believe that trying them out gives depth to our usually form choices! ! ! A huge 10 right back atcha for being such a valued lover of poetry! ! !
This is magnificent, Susan. As I read, I pictured a tormented citizen giving a description to a law enforcement officer/s. In some ways, I think this poem captures the essence of being that citizen. Superbly, perfectly done, Susan. A perfect 10.
I wonder if they would issue a BOLO for the perp based on that description! If they did, I wonder how many police officers would head for the white house on the intersection of America and hysteria...I am pleased that you liked this piece and thank you for such an encouraging response and that sparkling 10! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
Thank you very much. I am speechless. I am deeply touched your poetic words. This ia an excellent poem. Ripple of your mirror is well reflected.10
Thank you, Kumarmani, for this comment and for introducing this poem style to us! It certainly demands a tautness of line, theme, and word selection and that is an important value in writing prose or poetry! Thank you for your 10, it reflects back to you! ! !
This is really creatively done! I too first noticed this format of poetry, reading Mr. Mahakul poetry; I have yet to try one myself!
Try it! ! ! It is fun, exercises the mind, and frustrates you all at the same time! What more can we ask from a new poetry form! ! You write so beautifully I think you would achieve a great result. Thank you for giving me an atta-girl! ! ! !
A very difficult form of poetry I think. and very impressive when delivered beautifully. very nice and magical piece. I shall come again to read and comment. It is very hard to absorb such beauty in words and lines RIPPLE MIRROR HAYNAKU. To MyPoemList.
Thank you for putting this effort on your fav list. I have found a few examples of this ripple mirror haynaku and find I need practice! ! ! It can indeed be a beautiful form of poetry but a bit difficult in the 2nd half. Thank you, my friend, for your supportive remarks! And I do like perching there on your fav list!
Part 3 There were different Prakrits used in different part- it was Malav Prakrit in Malav, Maharashtra Prakrit in the West. Kalidasa used these languages too with Sanskrit, in his dramas.
part 2 The Shlokas of Vedas are Chanted, not recited. so, it uses a set of terse meters. And the language-Sanskrit- was best suited to it. Actually, Sanskrit was not the language used by common man for communicating. It was a chaste language, used for writing. Poetry was also written in that language. But it was not suited for singing. So songs-Geetaka- used Prakrit, the colloquial languages.
The Japanese style of commenting on life, viewing it from a different angle, with piercing subtlety is commendable. Each form of poetry used to deal with different subjects. Now that differentiating lines have withered away. Japanese poetic styles may be subjected to further discussion on ph. For that matter, each culture, language has its own style. Its own set of meters too. It is very interesting to study this aspect of poetry writing.
I am confused. I skimmed the history of the poem briefly- and I thought the style was a fairly recent one and now I can't find the reference. So is this a Japanese form of poetry? Are there other rules for the writing of them? I am going to return to Google and try to find where I stumbled onto this Haynaku. Hope I didn't just slaughter an old and revered poetic form.
Hey, girl, hope life is loving you! ! ! I had an interesting time writing the second part of the poem- -the words weren't in the mood to jumping hoops as I asked them to do!
That rippled aspect caused me to be a bit sea sick- - it requires thought but it can be done especially if you stand upside down. Thank you for reading!
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Oh my sides are hurting! ! ! Hahahahahahahahahaha==oh my word- I mean your word! ! ! Great comment to place under a photo of the orange face.