Remembrance Day. Comments

I think you captured the essence of men who had come off war and tried to get back to norm. I loved the poem and its rendition of melancholy.

Hi Gary, your poem is good and I was pleased to read it. However, like prose writing there exists a possibility of another re-write or further editing. If you go through the process your poem will develop more. Take heart and stick with your writing. Best wishes. Why don't you publish your poem? Cleveland

That's a fine piece of work Gary. Worthy of a place of honour. I know every nation, every creed has it's own set of ethics, it's own principles on right or wrong, but that should be cast aside in honour of soldiers who obeyed the call and died for their country, This excellent poem, full of rhyme and imagery forms a wonderful tribute to them. Now I have to scurry to find if I have posted one on the same theme. Tom

Nicely said. Great rhythm and diction. Mesmerizing rhymes. I'm surprised you called it Remembrance Day. That's a Commonwealth term. I'm assuming you're American. I have one here called Petals. You might enjoy it.