Friday, March 27, 2009

Release Me Comments

Rating: 5.0

You say I can be anything and do anything
Then you turn around and confine my mind
Erase my thoughts
Shatter my dreams and make me blind
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Vanessa Kingsley
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Greenwolfe 1962 11 April 2009

This is a solid writing but it isn't special in any way. I tried hard to find a phrase or sentence that stood out, and I couldn't find one. I would describe this as plain. The meaning is crystal clear and the substance of the message could be quite profound in ways. But the piece ends rather quietly and the last rhyme was not very good. If a poem ever needed a special ending it was this one. Overall, I would say only fair. GW62

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John Lyday 10 April 2009

A little rebellion never hurt anyone. Nicely done.

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Ken Suh 09 April 2009

This is a very insightive poem. I love how you amde it ryhme :) ! ! ! lol its excellent like always :) !

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Chitra - 09 April 2009

a profound piece..a struggle for reestablishing one's identity...great way to go

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Eyan Desir 09 April 2009

Good write good work But I will like you to make your poems flow more 10

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Barry A. Lanier 09 April 2009

Don't cage my hands toss me in the sea, release these chains, where I can be, a woman with an unconfined mind, , , this is the last warning this time.....go girl

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Janell Cressman 08 April 2009

Truely amazing! ! ! ! ! ! don't let people tell you who you are! ! thats amazing! ! ! !

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Vanessa Kingsley

Vanessa Kingsley

Colorado Springs, Colorado
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