Slouching beside my parents
A shabby shriveled bloke
Wrapped himself in a rug worn
Laden with a bulky bag torn
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The poem begins so beautifully and with your unique narrative style, you portray a piece of art through the poem. But the best part is the ending where the reflection comes in. Not to forget the superb imagery. Really a perfect one for me.
Great piece of work. Keep it up and let us learn from you as well. Thank you. E.K.L.
it sounds as though your telling a story while still keeping it poetic and that your reflecting either on yourself or soeone around you
i absolutely love the way you told a story in this poem. in my opinion, it seems as though you have a sort of 'old english' story-telling flare. i find that as i read this, i sort of escaped reality, which i think is essential for telling a good story.
Rich reflection is a refreshing river. Well done my friend.
Poem writing I love to say painting emotion with words… If one swayed by excellence ‘Dead’ becomes the poet. Ten. dr. sakti Cordially invite to my page [poem] read / comment and….
Poetry-writing is a way to self-fulfillment. If one gets fame and money also it is a bonus. The essence remains expression of the rhythm within in a rhythmic way. Aesthetic persons always enjoy good poetry or poetry of their liking we not at any time asking to go through our verses. A nice reflective poem on poet's feelings.
if a writer of poetry is looking for fame not usually happens where every poem is liked bad with the good
Great effort, my brother! I understand. Yours may very well be my own story!
I really enjoyed this poem.It was really good and expressed many things.I got many pictures in my mind about what you where talking about.Thanks for sharing. :) (:
Noordeen, The poem evolves some shabby memoirs of the past. The bliss from the dusty old grief is assorted with nostalgic environment. Why the shabby bookseller sprawling beside your parents? The link is not conceived to me as desired. The poem has a thirst to admire jovial verses of the past generation. Appreciated your effort. Admired the notion…. jaleel
a poets life is one of peer pressure, and we actually look forward to hear what our peers have to say about us and our works. and you have touched all your peers with this write. a ten
It's a very interesting plot. Great imagery!
A GOOD NARRATIVE POEM...CREATIVITY EVEN IF NOT RECOGNIZED GIVES A JOY
a very nice sentimental voice. unpretentious and soothing