Redemption Comments

A long poem, but once I started reading I could not stop. Very well written and intriguing. Congrats

Heartiest Congratulations on the poem of the Day as also for composing such a lovely poem that is a pleasure to read.

And yet i try! Thanks for sharing this lovely poem with us.

I was thinking in terms of St John and Revelations. There is an Apocalyptic feel to the poem. I love the way you have created the mysterious opening with the tramp like figure. The descriptive passages in the first half are most pleasing, Is he an observer planning future action to provide redemption. It is full of interesting detail and very thoughtful. It gets poem of the day on merit. Well done Gergana. Tom Billsborough

His life was dedicated to the greater good And all his heart had ever known was light I’ve always listened to my inner voice, The chariot was waiting still With seven horses made of fire, “Sent down from heaven, and so I will I shall fulfill that great desire.” After reading carefully i thought of Prophet Ezekiel, Moses, Elijah, and naturally Jesus although the thought of Jesus does not confirm here fully. But you wrote the word Redemption. Redemption of humanity is always conncected to Jesus and the final thought of keeping clean that is also a part of the redemptive act of Jesus on the Cross.. i may be wrong b ut that is the way i humbly interpret your poem. than k you very nice. i am giving a 10.

ok, a quick look, if i can manage a quick one! I don’t know if you planned them, but I like two alliterations I see in: “Softly clad in a cloak of stars, A man was roaming on his own Holding a book, thick with scars His face was hidden beneath a hood” …………yeah, I like rhymes as well. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - “So many questions, I shall never pry” …………….. pry into what, I wonder? I’m thinking jesus, but, let’see, who else could it be? “Would once exist and were unbound” ………were or where? without much punctuation (specifically: periods to end most sentences) , I can not be sure of where a sentence ends. I had to look up bane: “Dictionary 1bane noun \ˈbānDefinition of BANE 1 a obsolete: killer, slayer b: poison c: death, destruction [stop the way of those that seek my bane — Philip Sidney] d: woe 2 : a source of harm or ruin: curse [national frontiers have been more of a bane than a boon for mankind — D. C. Thomson] “ my bible knowledge is dated and incomplete. I had to do a search to try to figure out who was ascending in a chariot, though it sounded familiar. maybe you are not talking about the same guy. I still think ‘Jesus” fits, in an unfamiliar way to me. “2 Kin.2: 11 And it came to pass, as they still went on, and talked, that, behold, there appeared a chariot of fire, and horses of fire, and parted them both asunder; and Elijah went up by a WHIRLWIND into heaven.” I appreciate all the nice rhymes. it is the story I’m not sure of. thanks for sharing. bri :) among the lines I enjoyed (most) : “He looked above and there it was- Ursa Major in the clear sky, “How I wish I could fall in love I would break down and simply cry.” - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - “ “I hope they all shall keep it clean” “ …………… well, if the wish was for men (and women) to keep the Earth clean, he might be disappointed. : ( [maybe] God needs to limit population growth of the human race, but I think She/He could do it without war, disease, and others acts of suffering. heaven needs to brainstorm the subject! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

i felt like reading a story, really nice..... Keep up the good work

very good poem, with descriptive elegance. Well done!