Red Lace Comments

Well done, ed. I enjoyed it.

Er, dance not walk, or sing not talk. You get my point, Ed, do you not?

Francis' comments are well-taken here. I noticed, Ed, that you repeated 'red lace' five times in the poem when it's being the title would've been sufficient. Redundancy is one thing versifiers try to avoid to make the poem sing, not walk.

full of imaginations...Agggh! hehe! Like it!

Good. Surprise ending. I suggest: stanza 3, add article: 'I caught a glimpse' stanza 6, unwarranted tense shift; should be: 'The past insinuated' stanza 10: 'another's' (not: 'other's')

Another finely woven piece from you Eddie, poignant and heartfelt, 10 Lynda xx

poignant poem woven with fine metaphors and simile..Thanks for the share...10+++

resonant imagery...enchanting...

This one is very well written. The RED LACE references all the way through make the writing and the story memorable. This writing needs no rhythm and rhyme because of those references. A very nice piece and one that carries a kind of interest with it. GW62

Nice one. Keeps your attention all the way through. Jim

How a small reminder can open a flood gate.

Brilliant use of red lace to paint bittersweet memories of a lost lover. Kind regards, Sandra

I really really like this one. Images darted in and out as your visions and memories played to the music of your mind. Karin Anderson

a great simile poem..nice piece...10

it's sad and sweet at the same time.10!