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I liked it but there were a couple word mistakes you should type it on microsoft then copy then paste on this site

It is a very nice poem, tht has many meanings, Keep it up, and i hope for u a good luck

yeah death note is manga....right? well anyway very powerful......but remember we arent the ones who choose our destiny. well.................. i kept reading it and you did good in that sense. thanks for sharing! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! 9.....

You appear to be very young, and the theme here implies a very violent world, even though fictional, of which I don't approve. Also there is no poetic feeling, nor redeeeming virtue in it. Good poetry has to sing with a rhythm, if not rhyming. Yours has neither..

Now, it is awesome. Very good 10 from me You have alot of talent for your age Thanks for sharing -Brie

Ummmmm It's good But needs more details to clarify the main thought of the poem The thoughts in the first part are kinda broken.The last part of the poem is much better than the first. But as a whole it is Good ^_^

Very, Very good. I agree with Michelle....A little more detail.... But other than that... I like thanks for sharing -Brie

I LIKED IT BUT JUST GIVE MORE DETAIL TO THE THINGS YOUR TALKING ABOUT.... MAKE THE READERS WANT TO KNOW MORE ABOUT YOUR POEM OR STORY.......LIKE THEY SAY 'LEAVE THEM IN SESPENSE'

i like how you used other cultural things in poems and gave it meaning i also like the subject you chose and the grammar and structure was well thought of

I like it, it is well spoken

Hello Poet. I would only suggest to get a good spelling check program and make sure each piece is checked before posting, Feathers is just one misspelled word for example. I would suggest some punctuation as well to help keep the flow. It is an interesting read. Good luck, Loyd

i like the series and i like your work

very nice write, i like how you start out with a rhyming pattern and then slowly drift into your own poetic style, it allows you to express yourself very nicely,

i like the honesty u want to express in here..if i were to be asked, this is a very beautifl one.