Rape: A Living Nightmare Comments

(cont.) My poem. [[Never should anyone feel that they 'have to' read something I offer.]]: The Rape(S) That Didn' T Go As Planned

P.S. For a MUCH DIFFERENT 'rape story, including its result for the man', I have a 'perhaps-not-completely-serious' poem which my sister called 'GROSS', but I don't know if she read it. (cont.)

Ok, Rose Marie, I'm done for now. I don't ASSUME this story applies to YOU. i will/do feel 'sorry' for any woman put is such 'positions'.

FIVE stars ***** In addition to 'missing punctuation', sometimes starting Each Line with a Capital letter can cause trouble for me and others. : ) bri

stanza 8: I might 'tweak' aka 'adjust; fine-tune' the ending lines a bit. stanza 9: without punctuation to divide sentences, readers can't be sure where a sentence ends & another begins.

stanza 6: To make it read (for me) as a complete sentence, I suggest starting with 'I am'.And I hope readers understand that, here, 'dying' means 'very anxious' to be born. (I Think) ;)

stanza 5: Does 'he' and 'his' refer to the rapist or a resultant-son of the rape victim, OR sometimes to one and sometimes to the other? ? ?

Rose Marie, I man not 'have the time' today to finish commenting. Feel free to remind me if you thing I did not finish; my wife may take me away soon! ;)

Putting up a struggle against a rapist (or many other criminals) can be a great idea. But, it CAN LEAD TO an unwelcome, even deadly, response. : (

stanza 3: Instead of 'the might', I suggest using 'my might'. For me it is more specific, and also adds an alliteration, which I like. : ) I also like 'core of the manhood'. Ouch! !

Nonconsensual act.High deplorable by any standard.Great crafting with an imagery.

A detailed description of rape with exact wording and feeling.Thank you Madam for your writing acumen against such a social even.some times I feel what pleasure is received by a rapist with such forceful and

He penetrated my body With utmost force Pulled, squashed and twisted Tortured and battered.....powerful articulation against heinous crime!

Your poem is painful. Its difficult to even imagine. For one time pleasure a lifetime burden for someone. The trauma is really unimaginable

I liked these lines most I voluntarily relinquished My absolute rights over him To someone who really cares And loves him Unconditionally.

Such a strong subject about violating a woman or child...Sad but true leaving a person scarred for life...

This poem is really touching...honest and realistic write..thank you Rose

I kept wrestling with my feelings........brilliantly put! A magnificent poem! My pleasure revisiting this beautiful poem!

My strength drained Thigh fell away Dignity, honor And womanhood violated Body succumbed To his power and control. a poem highlighting all the pains and sufferings of a woman......... so many things like this happen........ thank u dear poetess. feeling sorry for all those women who suffer it. thank u. tony

Subtlety and poetic beauty be thine another name, Rose Marie, Brilliant rendition of inner nightmare, Excellent, full marks