Rain Comments

your work is very promising. It seems a little choppy in spots? I don't know what it's like where you live, but, it could be more effective saying in the first few lines.., .man/animals, rather than man and animals to combine for more emphasis. Because, we read these poems, not a bird, or a horse. Just a suggestion. and at the end, so happy, so glad, the rain came? Silver lined hands, , , again, whose silver lined hands? It sort of confuses me as a reader... is rain what every creature is rejoicing over?

'tis a great poem! ! How elegantly you depicted this poem! ! ! Really an excellent work! ! 10+++++